Original:Sentence 1: the titanic carried more then 1,500 people to there graves it was believed to by unsinkable
Changed: The Titanic carried more than 1,500 people to their graves; it was believed to be unsinkable.
Orignal:Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land
Changed: Because the student teacher arrives next week, we need to finish reading Eliot's long poem The Waste Land.
DOL 26
Original:Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly
Changed: Many well known writers submit articles and stories to the Atlantic Monthly, a renowned magazine.
Original:Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library
Changed: "I am very eager to read the French novel The Plague," Carmen said "but it's not in our library."
DOL 27
Original:Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations
Changed: Everyone in this grade are responsible for this year's dance; therefore, we must all raise funds for the decoration.
Original:Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner
Changed: Having worked for eight hours, I need to sit down, listen to music, and enjoy a good dinner.
DOL 28
Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet
Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing
DOL 29
Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library
Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified
DOL 29-32 SKIP
DOL 33
Original:Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library
Changed: "When are these books due Hans? Should I take them to the library?"
Original:Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified
Changed: After the Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the Constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.
DOL 34
Original:Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain
Changed: Much depends on wheter you're effected by the high altitude when you climb the mountain.
Original:Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier
Changed: While half the class used the Internet, the rest will study the Smithsonian magazines that are different from the ones we used earlier.
DOL 35
Original:Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft
Changed: Oh, we haven't finished our group book report because noone had a copy of Marie's draft.
Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming
Changed: My mum likes canoeing on the YellowStone River, hiking in Montana, and camping in Wyoming.
DOL 36
Original:Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated
Changed: "There are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice." Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal, stated.
Original:Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think
Changed: The World Series, although often exciting, is sometimes too slow paced for me and my mom.
DOL 37
Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain)
Original:
ms paula jeffers
campton paper company
18376 river drive
minneaplois mn
dear ms jeffers
Changed:
Ms. Paula Jeffers
Campton Paper Company
18376 River Drive
Minneapolis MN
Dear Ms. Jeffers.
DOL 38
Original:Sentence 1: because the united states constitution sits out certain individual writes that we is all privileged to enjoy
Changed: The Unites States Constitution sets out certain individual rights that we are all privileged to enjoy.
Sentence 2: we havent neither the time or the ability to practice the play the reason being we lost so many actors to the flew
Changed: We don't have the time nor the ability to practice the play because we lost so many actors to the flu.
DOL 39
Original:Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner
Changed: To be allowed to go to the party, I had to finish my science project, clean my room, and help mum fix dinner.
Original:Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29
Changed: Mr. Corazzini, who can never start his car, took the bus to Dulles Airport on Tuesday, October 29.
DOL 40
Original:Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico
Changed: Luisa bought an antique pitcher from Mexico, for her cousin who is in Atlanta.
Original:Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry
Changed: Oscar, please set these books on the library table if you don't have a lot of things to carry.
DOL 41
Original: park rangers who works in large forats periodically set fir to marked lands to encourage new growth
Changed: Park rangers, who work in large forests, periodically set fire to lands to encourage new growth.
Original: after the discovery of penicillin very many miracle drugs appeared ironically through 40 years bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs
Changed: After the discovery of penicillin, many miracle drugs appeared; ironically, though, forty years have past and bacteria are becoming more resistant to drugs.
DOL 42
Original: Sentence 1: because of differences between the 8 camp counselors causing a change in the field trips destination
Changed: Differences among the eight camps counselors caused a change in the field trip's destination.
Original:Sentence 2: first felicia planned the party secondly deciding on decorations theird she invited special guests
Changed: First, Felicia planned the party, secondly, decided on decoration, and third, invited special guests.
DOL 43
Original:Sentence 1: do juan and davids ownership of this Sailboat entitle them two to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club
Changed: Does Juan and David's ownership of this sailboat entitle them two memberships in the Winthrop Beach Yacht Club?
Original:Sentence 2: the article in search of spanish galleons in the book shipwrecks was writed by kiber and rotondi who believes it will be found
Changed: The article, in serach of Spanish Galleons
DOL 44
Sentence 1: neither rasheed or larry dont want their teams loss to suggest that team members didnt play good
Sentence 2: mr. Kato explained that because the rule does not effect the entire school but only individual students as a result of that rule the student handbook was checked
DOL 25
Original:Sentence 1: the titanic carried more then 1,500 people to there graves it was believed to by unsinkable
Changed: The Titanic carried more than 1,500 people to their graves; it was believed to be unsinkable.
Orignal:Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land
Changed: Because the student teacher arrives next week, we need to finish reading Eliot's long poem The Waste Land.
DOL 26
Original:Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly
Changed: Many well known writers submit articles and stories to the Atlantic Monthly, a renowned magazine.
Original:Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library
Changed: "I am very eager to read the French novel The Plague," Carmen said "but it's not in our library."
DOL 27
Original:Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations
Changed: Everyone in this grade are responsible for this year's dance; therefore, we must all raise funds for the decoration.
Original:Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner
Changed: Having worked for eight hours, I need to sit down, listen to music, and enjoy a good dinner.
DOL 28
Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet
Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing
DOL 29
Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library
Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified
DOL 29-32 SKIP
DOL 33
Original:Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library
Changed: "When are these books due Hans? Should I take them to the library?"
Original:Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was ratified
Changed: After the Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the Constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.
DOL 34
Original:Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain
Changed: Much depends on wheter you're effected by the high altitude when you climb the mountain.
Original:Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier
Changed: While half the class used the Internet, the rest will study the Smithsonian magazines that are different from the ones we used earlier.
DOL 35
Original:Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft
Changed: Oh, we haven't finished our group book report because noone had a copy of Marie's draft.
Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming
Changed: My mum likes canoeing on the YellowStone River, hiking in Montana, and camping in Wyoming.
DOL 36
Original:Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated
Changed: "There are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice." Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal, stated.
Original:Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think
Changed: The World Series, although often exciting, is sometimes too slow paced for me and my mom.
DOL 37
Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain)
Original:
ms paula jeffers
campton paper company
18376 river drive
minneaplois mn
dear ms jeffers
Changed:
Ms. Paula Jeffers
Campton Paper Company
18376 River Drive
Minneapolis MN
Dear Ms. Jeffers.
DOL 38
Original:Sentence 1: because the united states constitution sits out certain individual writes that we is all privileged to enjoy
Changed: The Unites States Constitution sets out certain individual rights that we are all privileged to enjoy.
Sentence 2: we havent neither the time or the ability to practice the play the reason being we lost so many actors to the flew
Changed: We don't have the time nor the ability to practice the play because we lost so many actors to the flu.
DOL 39
Original:Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner
Changed: To be allowed to go to the party, I had to finish my science project, clean my room, and help mum fix dinner.
Original:Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29
Changed: Mr. Corazzini, who can never start his car, took the bus to Dulles Airport on Tuesday, October 29.
DOL 40
Original:Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico
Changed: Luisa bought an antique pitcher from Mexico, for her cousin who is in Atlanta.
Original:Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry
Changed: Oscar, please set these books on the library table if you don't have a lot of things to carry.
DOL 41
Original: park rangers who works in large forats periodically set fir to marked lands to encourage new growth
Changed: Park rangers, who work in large forests, periodically set fire to lands to encourage new growth.
Original: after the discovery of penicillin very many miracle drugs appeared ironically through 40 years bacteria are becoming very much more resistant to drugs
Changed: After the discovery of penicillin, many miracle drugs appeared; ironically, though, forty years have past and bacteria are becoming more resistant to drugs.
DOL 42
Original: Sentence 1: because of differences between the 8 camp counselors causing a change in the field trips destination
Changed: Differences among the eight camps counselors caused a change in the field trip's destination.
Original:Sentence 2: first felicia planned the party secondly deciding on decorations theird she invited special guests
Changed: First, Felicia planned the party, secondly, decided on decoration, and third, invited special guests.
DOL 43
Original:Sentence 1: do juan and davids ownership of this Sailboat entitle them two to membership in the winthrop beach yacht club
Changed: Does Juan and David's ownership of this sailboat entitle them two memberships in the Winthrop Beach Yacht Club?
Original:Sentence 2: the article in search of spanish galleons in the book shipwrecks was writed by kiber and rotondi who believes it will be found
Changed: The article, in serach of Spanish Galleons
DOL 44
Sentence 1: neither rasheed or larry dont want their teams loss to suggest that team members didnt play good
Sentence 2: mr. Kato explained that because the rule does not effect the entire school but only individual students as a result of that rule the student handbook was checked